If you have any suggestion please feel free to tell me.
Over the past few decades, people have drastically changed the way they choose their career. Times have changed a great deal, and people no longer feel forced into a certain profession. People are now given endless choices and possibilities, and it is up to them to decide what they want to do the rest of their lives. When facing these important decisions, it is very easy to become confused. Fortunately, for myself, I found this decision to be a very easy one. I come from a family of teachers. Therefore, it did not take long to decide that teaching was the career choice for me.
After deciding on the education field, I then felt the need to choose a major. I chose high school mathematics because I felt it would allow me to teach a subject that many students of today’s time don’t really grasp as well as other subjects. I have always had a love for knowledge, and for children. I feel that the children of today truly are the future of tomorrow and the creators of what is to come. Children are all too often over looked in today’s society. It is my belief that it is part of a teacher’s job to help children learn how to express their opinions not only in the classroom, but in the real world as well.
While attending the College of the Bahamas, I intend to obtain my bachelor’ of education in secondary certification, learn more behavior strategies to improve my classroom management and to continue to embrace cultural diversity. After accomplishing these goals there are many other plans that I plan to live up to. My main goal as High School teacher would be to reach out to as many students as I can. I know that Mathematics can be a difficult subject for some students but when I teach my aim is to show them that they can love learning. I believe that when a child has elevated from a D to a C or B student I can say that I have accomplished my goal.
I chose the College of the Bahamas because of many reasons but mainly because it is a chance and opportunity for higher learning, it is close to home and I think that if someone is to be successful in their life they must start at home and then go abroad.
#1 by David on August 4th, 2011
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Did the essay have any type of prompt?
#2 by Mike on August 4th, 2011
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thanks for th essay, should look good on my application.
just kidding but that’s what people are probably thinking right now. good luck getting into college
#3 by Cool P on August 4th, 2011
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nope why right boring nonsense when you can say i glow in the dark all the college administrators will be immediately impresses and take you in
#4 by haleyjade07 on August 4th, 2011
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You need to proofread it. There as some mistakes. You have made some comma errors also. Maybe take it to an english teacher and get them to review it for you. Good luck.
Also, it probably wasn’t the best idea to post your admissions essay onto a public site.
#5 by Ryan on August 4th, 2011
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I think instead of saying you “decided on education because your family is full of teachers,” you should say something about the values your family has instilled in you and the importance of education. Use specific examples from your life, tell a story from when you were growing up. I think this will sound much more passionate, and give the readers a much better sense of who you are.
#6 by J on August 4th, 2011
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careers
certain professions
After accomplishing these goals I have many other plans.
I chose the College of the Bahamas for many reasons
#7 by Heather on August 4th, 2011
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It’s good. first of all though, check your punctuation. You have commas in front of ands where you don’t need them.
One other suggestion: After accomplishing these goals there are many other plans that I plan to live up to…. change it to “After completing my education and training in college, I have many other goals I would like to accomplish.”
Also this is the correct punctuation for this sentence::: I know that Mathematics can be a difficult subject for some students, but when I teach, my aim is to show them that they can love learning.
And try this::: I chose the College of the Bahamas because of many reasons. Mainly I chose the College of the Bahamas because it is a chance and opportunity for higher learning. It is also close to my home and I think that if someone is to be successful in their life they must start at home and then go abroad.
#8 by DrIG on August 4th, 2011
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Your admission essay is very good./